Self Critique of Revised Script

My script is getting better with each critique, but still needs work with the emotions and reactions of the characters. I need to work on dialogue between characters, asking the question "Would some would really say this?", or "Can this be said in a different tone and if so which one?" Daphne's lines still need work. She  complains too much and needs more arch to her breaking point. The third confrontation of the drunk girl needs to be thought out more of what type of drunk : angry, happy, sad, etc. How Daphne reacts to this girl, is she trying to steal Andrew away from her or befriend both of them.