Self Critique of Project Sandwich

For the second project we were given a list of strategies to use for this project. I chose simultaneity and either collage or juxtaposition (I mixed the simultaneity shots together  and tied the story together so they would meet)

Synopsis: 
A man wakes up realizing that he is late grabs his pistol and runs, meanwhile a man is in a cafe is making a sandwich. The first man is running and running while the other is slowly making his sandwich. The second man is about to take a bite of his sandwich when he sees the first man  come into the cafe. The second man says "hi" and the first man shoots him then sits down and takes a bite of the sandwich.

Intent:
I wanted this to be a comedy, to build up the anticipation and tension of this man running and the man making the sandwich.

Problems/Things I Want to Do Better:
My problem with this project was the place that I chase for the man making the sandwich. The original room had enough room and a great view to have in the background, but that room was ocuppied with a class so I had to pick the Sleaze n Slime Cafe. Which was hard to direct in with so many people and other non controlling variables. I also had trouble shooting in class cause time was of essence and had to change places for the first man. Though now that I look back it has really helped me to plan more and be ready for the unexpected situations.

Sandwich from Martin Englert on Vimeo.

Revision of Apollo and Daphne

Last class I presented my first draft of my adaptation of Apollo and Daphne. I needed to do some more revisions and needed to be clearer on my break down and ending.

One Sentence Summary: Daphne tries to gain the courage to speak to Apollo, with the help from her friend Eros.

Theme:
It's better to have tried and failed, than not have tried at all.
Central Point:
Daphne tries to put herself out there.
Central Goal:
Daphne has a conversation with Apollo.

Synopsis:
In this adaptation of Apollo and Daphne, the roles are switched and Daphne is the main characters who goes after Apollo. Eros is holding a toga party and Daphne is there. Eros comes over to Daphne asking her how she is doing. As they're talking Apollo comes in, Daphne asks Eros who he is and Eros tells her. Eros tells her, he will be right back. He comes back with Apollo saying "Look who I found at the punch bowl." Apollo hands her a drink but she is too shocked to grasp the cup when he puts it in her hand and it spills on the floor splashing up and onto Apollo's toga. He leaves to go wash it off Eros follows to show him where the restroom is. Later that night Eros comes back over to Daphne and asks how she's doing. She asks about Apollo. Eros tries to encourage her to talk to him before he leaves. They both look over at him and he is walking out. Daphne runs after him. She catches up to him and starts a conversation with him. She asks him out,but is cut short because he has to go but offers to continue it later over coffee/lunch.

Act Structure Breakdown:

Act 1:
Eros walks up to Daphne and asks how she is enjoying his party.
Apollo walks in, Daphne asks Eros who he is.
After Eros leaves Daphne to get some punch.

Act 2:
Eros comes back with Apollo and punch. Apollo offers Daphne a drink, when she is handed the cup she doesn't grasp it in time and slips through her hand and the drink falls splashing onto Apollo's clothes.
Eros shows Apollo where the restroom is.
Later as Daphne is watching Apollo, Eros comes back over to Daphne.
Eros encourages her there is still time to talk to him, they look over and see him heading out the door. Eros looks at Daphne,"Maybe if you hurry."

Act 3:
Daphne takes off after him.
She catches up to him outside the building.
She strike up a conversation with him but is cut short cause he was leaving.
He suggests they should finish this conversation over coffee or lunch.

Modern Adaptation of Apollo and Daphne Summary

In this adaptation of Apollo and Daphne, Apollo is a girl who falls in love at first sight with another girl at a toga party. In the beginning of the story Apollo approaches Eros a friend of hers. They talk about the topic of love, and Apollo makes a remark that Eros doesn't sit well with (Still working on lines). About this time Daphne walks in the room and Apollo can not keep her eyes off of her. Eros smiles and tells Apollo about her so he is even more interested in her but leaves out a very important detail. All night Apollo can not get his mind off her but doesn't know what to say to her. When Daphne begins to leave, Apollo chases through the crowd trying to reach her. By the time she makes her way to her, out the door and down the stairwell. Apollo finally catches up to her outside. Apollo tells Daphne how she feels, but Daphne tells Apollo she is straight and things wouldn't work out. Daphne leaves, and Apollo is left on the walkway. She looks down and finds pin of a tree that Daphne wore on her toga. She looks up and Daphne is out of sight. Though things didn't work out with Daphne, Apollo will always have this pin to remember this "first love" by.

Modern Adaptation of Apollo and Daphne

Shot List                                                                                                            Page 1

Production Title: Adaptation of Apollo and Daphne

Shot#            Scene#            Type of Shot            One Line Description

Act 1

1                        outside            EST                        Apartment it the story takes place in

2                        inside 1            MS                         Apollo walks up to Eros to talk

3                        inside 1            OTS                       Eros talks to Apollo

4                        inside 1            OTS                       Apollo speaks to Eros, Apollo turns

5                        inside 1            CutAway               Daphne enters the room           

6                        inside 1            CU                         Pans closer, Eros tells about Daphne

Act 2

7                        inside 2            MS                         Daphne with friends, leaves to go dance           

8                        inside 2            OTS                       Apollo keeps looking over at Daphne

9                        inside 2            POV                      Apollo watches as Daphne dances

10                        inside 2            OTS                     Eros asks Apollo how she’s doing

11                        inside 2            OTS                     Apollo responds, goes after Daphne

12                        inside 2            WS                       Apollo struggles to get through crowd

13                        inside 2            MS                       Apollo reaches apt door looks into hall

14                        inside 2            OTS                     Stairwell, Daphne leaves building

Act 3

15                        outside 3            WS                     Apollo calls to Daphne

16                        outside 3            OTS                   Daphne turns towards Apollo

17                        outside 3            OTS                   Apollo claims his love for her

18                        outside 3            OTS                   Daphne tells she is straight and leaves

19                        outside 3            MS                     Apollo saddened looks down, picks up

20                        outside 3            Insert                 Picks up the pin/brooch

21                        outside 3             MS                    Looks up

22                        outside 3            POV                   Looks L and R but Daphne is gone

23                        outside 3             BS                     Apollo holds close to chest, goes back in

Apollo and Daphne

1. Original tale
http://www.gutenberg.org/files/22693/22693-h/22693-h.htm

2. Analysis

Characters:

Apollo: Sun god, He falls in love with Daphne and chases after her.

Daphne: Daughter of Peneus, the river god. She is immune to love and runs from Apollo.

Eros: After Apollo laughs at him for playing with a bow and arrows, Eros shoots Apollo with a golden arrow and Daphne with a lead arrow. Apollo, being hit with the golden arrow, falls in love with Daphne. Daphne, being hit with the leaden arrow, has a hatred for love and is immune to weaknesses that love brings.

Scenes

Scene 1:
Apollo walks up to Eros. Apollo jests why he would need to use weapons of war. Eros responds by shooting Apollo with a golden arrow and shoots Daphne with a lead arrow.

Scene 2:
Apollo looks down upon the beautiful Daphne as he drives his chariot across the sky each day, and at night he dreams of her.

Scene 3:
Apollo goes to Daphne in the forest. She hears his footsteps and runs away. Apollo chases after her, proclaiming his love for her. Seeing that she could not outrun the god she asked her father for help. Her father hears her and turns her into a laurel tree.

3 Act Structure


Act 1
Inciting Incident: Apollo and Eros are introduced.
Plot Point 1: Apollo jests at Eros. Apollo and Daphne are shot with arrows.

Act 2
First culmination: Apollo longs for Daphne until he cannot take being away from her.
Midpoint: Apollo goes to Daphne in the forest.
Plot Point 2: Apollo chases after Daphne.

Act 3

Climax: Apollo reaches Daphne, but Daphne asks for help from her father. Daphne is turned into a laurel   tree.
Denouement: Since Daphne was Apollo's first love he made the laurel tree be his symbol.

My Interpretation of Apollo and Daphne

I believe Apollo and Daphne is about "first love". No matter, how much we may love the person we are with at the present, we still have a piece of that "first love" in our hearts. Not to say that we love the "first love" more or would rather be with than the present. The "first love" leaves an impression on our hearts whether it's showing us love is possible or gives us the knowledge to get back up after that first love is lost.

A Brief Outline of Adaptation


Boy/girl falls in love with someone (open to the idea of boy loves girl, girl loves boy, boy loves boy, or girl loves girl).

Act 1:
Friend introduces Boy/girl to the other person. (The friend represents Eros)

Act 2:
Boy/girl admires person from afar.
Boy/girl confronts person.
Boy/girl chases after person (verbally or physically)

Act 3:
Boy/girl reaches the person. Person turns him/her down, breaks heart.
Boy/girl learns from mistakes/makes the best out of situation.

Shot List of Project 2

Concept and Strategy for In Class Project 2

For project 2, I am using simultaneity and compartmentalized. I wanted to show to events happening at the same time and bring them together at the end. If I am misusing the word compartmentalized for the strategy of pulling these events together please let me know.

Character A (Nick)is hungry and knows Character B(John) usually has makes a sandwich at twelve o'clock. Nick wakes up realizing John is making his lunch. Nick grabs his pistol and runs to the room that John is in to take it before John eats it all.

Story Board for In Class Project 2